"aaj yun hie baal sukhaate sukhaate
cheenton ke saath tumhari yaad chalak aayi
tumhari baton se jo hansi uthti thi...
usski goonj ke saath chalak aayi
phir towel se jab baal barse
toh vo baarish ki raat yaad aa gayi
jab geele baalon mei tumhe uljhaya tha
phir raat bhar baith ke tumne
apni baaton mei suljhaya tha
har suljhi baat ulajhti ja rahi thi
aur mai anjaane tumhare paas aa rahi thi
maine toh balon se bass shararat ki thi
tumne shararat ka faayda uthaya tha
baal suljhate suljhate apni chal mei fasaaya tha
kamar ke bal pe jane kaunsa saaz chedaa tha
gardan se baansuri bajaayi thi
hothon pe raagini sajaai thi
tumhare sur se aasman mei diye jal gaye thhe
tunhare hathon mei saarey jahan simat gae thhe
kaandhe pe din ho jataa tha
peeth pe raat ghir aati thi
phir aankh khulli toh khud hie hans ke socha
sochne se hoga bhi kya?
baal sukh gae hain
ab baandh hie leti hun"
very sensuous :) felt it..:)) n yes it did arouse the craving..:))
ReplyDeletemission accomplished then :D :)
ReplyDeleteyour mission was to arouse me ?? :P :D
ReplyDeleteto take my reader away and share the exact feelings of the speaker of the poem. :P :D
ReplyDeletevery sensuous...loved reading the whole thing except d last 2 lines..dey felt like my kind of bad jokes....change kar na thodi ending abhi mast hai fir awesome ho jaeygi :)
ReplyDelete@abhinav, thanks for the suggestion but I'll pass, in fact in my opinion the last lines are the best part of the poem, they're my favorite. :)
ReplyDeleteHey keep posting such good and meaningful articles.
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